Wednesday, April 22, 2020

Poetry Twofer Tuesday: NaPoWriMo 2020 Day 21: Lost in Translation

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Today's exercise from NaPoWriMo asks us to take a poem written in a language foreign to us and attempt to translate it without knowing the words. I decided to use "In Ithilien", which is written in the fictional language Neo-Sindarin, and give it a crack. This poem and more were found on this website. The original words and translation belong to their creator.

Original Poem
I laiss i-ferin thuiar
I 'wilith lim echui aur.
I mrethil peliar duiw laiss
Af filig linnol der' ennas.
Vi Ithilien, dôr lenthir lind
Gorain nesta velethril nín.

My Translation
I but a lass did travel there
I went off to lands beyond
The world is perilous to a lass
A feeling of loneliness inside me
In Ithilien I found myself
Going nowhere with none but me

The Actual Translation
The leaves of the beeches breathe
The sparkling air of day's awakening.
The birches spread the buds of leaves
For the small singing birds to linger there.
In Ithilien, land of the tuneful waterfalls
Wandering-together heals my beloved.

This poem will not appear in my forthcoming poetry collection. It is an exercise primarily utilizing work created by another poet. 

If you are interested in reading more of my poetry, check out my first poetry collection here.

Text copyright Cara Hartley 2020 except as indicated.

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  1. What an intriguing exercise.
    Tolkien apparently said that cellar door was the 'most' beautiful phrase - not because of its meaning but because of its sound... Which also makes it totally antionomatopeic.

    1. I love this exercise. It's great fun.
      I've always thought the word "ashen" had a beautiful sound, which my mother thinks is terrible of me because, of course, it indicates an unhealthy pallor. However, I don't mean that I find the MEANING of the word beautiful, only that the word itself sounds beautiful.


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